19th August 2019

Goldilocks

Once upon a time, there was a little girl named goldilocks. She went for a walk in the forest. Pretty soon, she came upon a house. She knocked and, when no one answered she was unsure if she should continue on her tiring path or walk in and except and the consequences, that might occur, but at the moment she just really wanted to talk to someone all the thoughts in her mind needed to be released. The only way she knew how, to talk to someone so she decided to walk in hoping she wouldn’t interrupt the people that lived inside. once she walked inside she smelt the delicious sensation of food, then she saw it, three bowls of porridge on the kitchen table. “I shouldn’t it’s not my food” then her stomach rumbled making the noise of a stamped. just eat it, you haven’t had anything in weeks, the little voice told her that was constantly in the back of her mind. “maybe just a little taste” goldilocks told herself.

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  1. Hi Lea,

    Something for you to focus on is your grammar and capitalisation. There are some minor examples of errors creeping into your work and this will negatively impact your writing.
    You also need to work on your structuring as well. You need to break up the paragraph so that your reader can understand and connect with the story you are trying to craft.

    Thank you

    Mr Johnson

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